I prefer romances where people fall in love gradually (as opposed to at first sight). So this line:
He wasn’t sure when it had happened exactly, at what point in their association Trailbreaker had gone from being merely convenient to being absolutely necessary – Trailbreaker had crept in quietly, unassumingly, and slotted neatly into place within his spark...
just made me melt.
You also do a good job of showing that Mirage and Hound have discussed Mirage's experience with Wheeljack, and Hound has taken it into consideration - which isn't easy given that you have to stay in Wheeljack's POV at all times. And the conversation between Ratchet and 'Jack was excellent. Ratchet really is a good friend, and that's another wonderful thing about this story - it explores friendship as well as romance.
Probably the only thing I'm disappointed about is that Wheeljack didn't get to talk to Hoist and Trailbreaker before the battle, but that's because I was hoping he'd work up the courage to do it, and that would have been another tense, emotionally charged discussion. Rather than TB finding out about it from someone else.
But I loved both Starscream's and Wheeljack's extremely realistic reactions at the end of the battle. Starscream is malicious and calculating and unstoppable - even after he's been shot down and damaged, he keeps trying to gain the upper hand and hurt his enemies. Delightful. :D As for Wheeljack, he'll find out that he's been worried for no good reason, right? That Trailbreaker still cares about him and finds him attractive? Holding out for that happy ending.
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He wasn’t sure when it had happened exactly, at what point in their association Trailbreaker had gone from being merely convenient to being absolutely necessary – Trailbreaker had crept in quietly, unassumingly, and slotted neatly into place within his spark...
just made me melt.
You also do a good job of showing that Mirage and Hound have discussed Mirage's experience with Wheeljack, and Hound has taken it into consideration - which isn't easy given that you have to stay in Wheeljack's POV at all times. And the conversation between Ratchet and 'Jack was excellent. Ratchet really is a good friend, and that's another wonderful thing about this story - it explores friendship as well as romance.
Probably the only thing I'm disappointed about is that Wheeljack didn't get to talk to Hoist and Trailbreaker before the battle, but that's because I was hoping he'd work up the courage to do it, and that would have been another tense, emotionally charged discussion. Rather than TB finding out about it from someone else.
But I loved both Starscream's and Wheeljack's extremely realistic reactions at the end of the battle. Starscream is malicious and calculating and unstoppable - even after he's been shot down and damaged, he keeps trying to gain the upper hand and hurt his enemies. Delightful. :D As for Wheeljack, he'll find out that he's been worried for no good reason, right? That Trailbreaker still cares about him and finds him attractive? Holding out for that happy ending.