First of all, since I'm just finding this now, comments on the whole fic:
Very, very realistic. It has a good flow, both plot-wise and emotion-wise; the angst is certainly there, but it isn't over done as it sometimes is in fics dealing with rape and the aftermath of it. Good progression of emotions within Wheeljack towards Bumblebee, shame turning into anger, which is common in real life.
Secondly, comments for this chapter:
YES. RATCHET. Wheeljack's utter trust and maybe overestimation of Ratch's self-control is... cute, somehow, but disarming, and that hot and fast flash of Ratchet/Wheeljack was PERFECT before everything fell apart, which was also well done. Trailbreaker ending up as a support was also nice to see. More soon, I hope!
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Date: 2009-08-05 08:11 am (UTC)Very, very realistic. It has a good flow, both plot-wise and emotion-wise; the angst is certainly there, but it isn't over done as it sometimes is in fics dealing with rape and the aftermath of it. Good progression of emotions within Wheeljack towards Bumblebee, shame turning into anger, which is common in real life.
Secondly, comments for this chapter:
YES. RATCHET. Wheeljack's utter trust and maybe overestimation of Ratch's self-control is... cute, somehow, but disarming, and that hot and fast flash of Ratchet/Wheeljack was PERFECT before everything fell apart, which was also well done. Trailbreaker ending up as a support was also nice to see. More soon, I hope!